Alone In The Mountain
Awakening
in the soft
light of the
sun
Lying
in the soft
snow of the
earth
Wondering
why I am still alive?
Is this Heaven?
Am I dreaming?
Where is this place?
This lonely cold and icy mountain
reminds me of my worthless life
Drifting and wandering upon
to a goal that never
reachable
I wish this coldness can take me away
It does not matter if
it is Heaven or Hell
It is a punishment
I have to get for
what I did
I will be
alone in this
cold and icy mountain that filled with
loneliness of eternity
for the rest of my life
Written for
Monday Poetry Potluck Week #5 – Beaches and Mountains
hosted by Jingle Poetryand
One Single Impression Prompt #137 – Lonely.
It does not matter if it’s heaven or hell–When there is only indifference then hope is truly gone, for an eternity. Great imagery, great photographs, great music.
Sadness comes after frustration. Your piece is filled with sadness and boredom. You have effectively put an emotions into this poem. Just a query, I am really amazed of the excellent photographs that accompanies your masterpieces. May I know the source of that photography?
I love your poetry. enough said!
I’m sending you healing thoughts and anti-chicken pox energy from my world!
Riika, there is only one word for this: dazzling. You are visually adept as well as poetically adept. Nice work.
the unmoving mountain.Powerful writing Riika.
Powerful stuff! We’ve all been there. Lovely music.
So very sad, yet so beautifully poignant…
sad…I don’t know what else to say…your words are powerful, deep..
OMG.. what a sad one!! Yet, so beautifully woven.. The image is just so capable of speaking many words..
Riika Darling, you rock my friend. This one gives a new dimension to our feelings and emotions.. very well done.. xoxox
I am quickly becoming an addict to your flow, whether tis bright or dark – thanks for the great and thoughtful read!
There is such sadness in this poem–the difference between loneliness and aloneness.
Oh, this would be a terrible place to have to stay for eternity! So much emotion expressed and such powerful imagery!
Woooo… everytime… wowarama, esp on the visuals…
Warmest Salad my friend
Luke
so sad…hopefully it is just fiction… great write though. Heartspell
What deep loneliness!
Sullen, thoughtful and very well done. Great poem!
yes, it is lonely there…
imagery or factual? anyway, I loved it!
Hi, I have always enjoyed your verses and your imagery with words. It gives me a great pleasure to find what you are painting with your alphabets… but this time I was not able to make it out… but anyways your verse was very beautiful … thanks for sharing…
जय दुर्गा जी, जय काली माँ
Jai Durga ji, Jai Kali Ma
Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/
sent you an email,
help please.
Alone in a mountain of torment and despair…deep.
Flowing and so good!
dad, farther and farther away
I love it! When I read the parts that are of Heaven and Hell, I think of the play that I wrote. Here’s mine:
http://thelunaticsdiary.blogspot.com/2010/10/wimderfehl-and-lovelorn.html
A sad surreal portrait of a lost soul seeking the purpose of their being.
A perfect write for Potluck….amazing imagery my dear girlfriend xxxx
Youch. So sad on so many levels yet very, very beautiful. My heart hurts and celebrates in the reading.
Your description of the cold mountain is mythological in its scope! Nicely written.
Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/10/10/assateague-beach/
Another dreamy and heavenly piece.
love the image,
magical tour to a place that is full of wonders and adventures…
Visiting your site is a treat for all the senses. The art, the imagery and the music are all spectacular.